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"before you get to the neck," I recommend "before one gets to the neck".
If "Terra" is used as a substitute for "Earth", why not capitalize "Terran giraffes"?
"redeveloped" Can you elaborate a little on this? I know the Frilled Greenscale, the ancestor of its ancestor, had a cheek spike, but specifying how "redevelopment" occurs could reduce the likelihood of something happening along the lines of a Carnotaurus redeveloping useful fingers just like its ancestors.
"one youngster" I recommend "offspring" or using a species-specific term (pup, cub, foal, calf, etc.). "Youngster" is somewhat anthropomorphic, like the Youngster Trainer class of kids below the age of 10 in Pokemon.
When you say the tail spikes are "underdeveloped", do you mean they're nubbins, don't break through the skin, are absent, or are smaller and softer? For reference, when hedgehogs are born, their spines are covered in a fluid-filled membrane, and when porcupines are born, their spikes are soft and bendable.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Oct 1 2021, 06:26 PM)

"before you get to the neck," I recommend "before one gets to the neck". If "Terra" is used as a substitute for "Earth", why not capitalize "Terran giraffes"? "redeveloped" Can you elaborate a little on this? I know the Frilled Greenscale, the ancestor of its ancestor, had a cheek spike, but specifying how "redevelopment" occurs could reduce the likelihood of something happening along the lines of a Carnotaurus redeveloping useful fingers just like its ancestors. "one youngster" I recommend "offspring" or using a species-specific term (pup, cub, foal, calf, etc.). "Youngster" is somewhat anthropomorphic, like the Youngster Trainer class of kids below the age of 10 in Pokemon. When you say the tail spikes are "underdeveloped", do you mean they're nubbins, don't break through the skin, are absent, or are smaller and softer? For reference, when hedgehogs are born, their spines are covered in a fluid-filled membrane, and when porcupines are born, their spikes are soft and bendable.

Fixed the two spelling errors, meanwhile im not exactly sure what you mean by the redeveloped cheek spike. Perhaps it could be dormant genes reawakening? What do you think?

As for the underdeveloped bit, which of the options you picked do you think would work best? I myself was thinking of having the spines be nubbins, but do you think one of the other options works better?

You could say the genetic mechanism which suppressed development of its cheek spikes was deleted or rendered nonfunctional, causing the ancestral trait to re-emerge.
Since I'm not sure if plent babies are even born with sacs or membranes, making them born with tiny nubbin-spikes or soft, flexible spikes would work. The soft, flexible spikes could be at a length long enough to be somewhat useful for small predators early on its life and might harden enough to be useful earlier in life.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Oct 1 2021, 09:07 PM)

You could say the genetic mechanism which suppressed development of its cheek spikes was deleted or rendered nonfunctional, causing the ancestral trait to re-emerge. Since I'm not sure if plent babies are even born with sacs or membranes, making them born with tiny nubbin-spikes or soft, flexible spikes would work. The soft, flexible spikes could be at a length long enough to be somewhat useful for small predators early on its life and might harden enough to be useful earlier in life.

Alright, made some edits, how do these look?

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?:
What changes?:

• External?: Coloration, long neck
• Internal?: Less offspring
• Behavioral/Mental?:

Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: N

Habitat:
Type?: 2/2
Flavor?: 3/3
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y ( 4m -> 6m
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A
Other?: N/A

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: Y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split?
Other?: N/A

Status: Pending(Replace/Split from ancestor)

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Nov 6 2021, 03:00 PM)

Approval Checklist: Art: Art Present?: Y Art clear?: Y Gen number?: Y All limbs shown?: Y Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y Realistic additions?: Y Name: Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y Creator?: Y Ancestor: Listed?: What changes?: External?: Coloration, long neck Internal?: Less offspring Behavioral/Mental?: Are Changes Realistic?: Y New Genus Needed?: N Habitat: Type?: 2/2 Flavor?: 3/3 Connected?: Y Wildcard?: N/A Size: Same as Ancestor?: N Within range?: Y ( 4m -> 6m Exception?: N/A Support: Same as Ancestor?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Diet: Same as Ancestor?: Y Transition Rule?: N/A Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Respiration: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Thermoregulation: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Reproduction: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Other?: N/A Description: Length?: Good Capitalized correctly?: Y Replace/Split from ancestor?:  Split? Other?: N/A Status: Pending(Replace/Split from ancestor)

Alright, i edited it so its more clearly a split