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I'm interested in retconning Bloisters to redevelop sexual reproduction to be like this as well.

Unless a problem, in which case I can add more about that to this.

I recommend using a name other than "Little Bloisters". It doesn't sound at all like a real animal clade's name.

"Minibloisters" could work, if you don't care about originality, or "Long-Scooped Bloisters" if you want it to sound like a plausible clade name. You could also use "Least Bloisters", to link it to things like least terns or least weasels, or "Lesser Bloisters", although those two do sound mean.

Admittedly, checking Wikipedia reveals the "least weasel" is also called the "little weasel", though it doesn't seem to be the standard name. There's also the little red flying fox. However, in general, using "little" in the name seems to be rare.


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There should be a scientific name immediately after the common name, which is enclosed in parentheses.

You should specify whether they're 10-20 cm long or 10-20 cm wide.


They're logically ectotherms. Most invertebrates are.

It's best to specify the feeding range for planktivores. Technically, both sponges and blue whales are planktivores, but krill is much bigger than what most sponges eat.

Please trim the artwork to have less empty space on the sides. It should also remove the artifacts of scanning (the dark areas) at the bottom, or, better yet, go under a quick processing on an image editor like GIMP or Krita to increase contrast and get rid of the paper details.

The details in the reproduction part of the template, as well as the word "exoskeleton" under support, should be capitalized. It would be ideal to specify what its skeleton is made of, unless, in its ancestry, it was never specified.

"scavengers, Planktivores, and Detritivores" "Planktivores" and "Detritivores" are capitalized here. That's an error.

I think "15% to 50%" sounds right.


"what their preferred food source" Were you going for "their preferred food source" or "what their preferred food source is"?

"their head" "Their heads" is correct.

"Six legs with two segments all attaching between the third and fourth body segment. All legs twisted so that their ends to some degree face toward the anterior of the body, and the final pair of legs being roughly half the length of the first two pairs." Did you intend to merge these together? As it is, these two sentences don't look right.

"attaching to the front" "Attaches to the front".

"the arm being comprised of three mobile segments, the final segment of the manipulating arms are developed into a scoop shape."

The grammar doesn't work right here. One solution is: "with the arm[...]and the final segment of the manipulating arms being developed into a scoop shape."

"forming the": "forms".

"their decisive niches." What "their" references here is unclear. It's best to substitute "their" with "Little Bloisters".

I'll provide more feedback later.

I kind of like the name Lesser Bloisters.
That's pretty good.

As for the image, that's a phone photo, I could see about cropping on my phone.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Oct 9 2021, 08:36 PM

Your typo on the Little Bloisters topic inspired a hilarious mental image.

Reduced to 77% of original (913 x 685)

"A Little Bloister, shopping at Sam's [Club]".

(In case you didn't know, Sam's Club is a members-only retail store in the U.S., kind of like Wal-Mart.)

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"Wide scoops for those"[...] This sentence doesn't make sense. An easy solution is shifting the order of parts of the sentence. The following is a framework:

"Species that collect sand and sift out debris have wide scoops,"

". Large fan like structures for sifting Open water[...]" can be altered in the same way.

"Open water" has a capitalization error.

"are very wildly" You probably meant "vary wildly".

"their species lives." The species lives.

"Sam's". sand.

"Flora or near them" has a capitalization error.

Remember to increase contrast on the image. The papery background is distracting.

I updated it

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Coloration, Scoop lengths, Feather sizes
• Internal?: Sexual reproduction
• Behavioral/Mental?:

Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: Y (Done)

Habitat:
Type?: Global (Aquatic)
Flavor?: Global (Aquatic)
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y
Exception?: Genus range

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Y

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N
Reasonable changes (if any)?: NA

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?:

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?:

Status: Approved