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Ornamented hobbies: Are you sure that shouldn't be "hobies"? There are several falcon species called hobbies.
" their burrow." Its burrow.
"females having to do this especially." How so? Do the males not need to eat as much?
"strength, the" The comma should be a period.
" their eye." That's some odd grammar.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Oct 26 2021, 06:34 PM)

Ornamented hobbies: Are you sure that shouldn't be "hobies"? There are several falcon species called hobbies. " their burrow." Its burrow. "females having to do this especially." How so? Do the males not need to eat as much? "strength, the" The comma should be a period. " their eye." That's some odd grammar.

Alright, made some edits. Do these look better?

" with females exclusively going out to forage while for males its a bit more variable depending on the status of its particular burrow. "
If some males do also forage, that would suggest that, among the species in general, the females are not the only ones ("exclusively") foraging. I recommend: "Females obtain food only by going out to forage, while whether males forage varies depending on the status of its particular burrow".
"While their ancestor did have a row of spines on their back," Its back.
"claws and face." Faces.
Do the males and females have slightly different coloration on their forelegs and flanks, or is that just natural variation, or a result of individual drawings not being identical?
I like the drawings and concepts.

Made the grammatical edits, does it look good?

It was technically due to them being separate drawings, but its likely a case of individual variation as well though it tends to look like what you see on either sex. Still fixed the female's image though

This post has been edited by OviraptorFan: Oct 27 2021, 02:19 PM

" laid into burrow" I know reproductive methods are usually capitalized, but I really don't know what to do with that one.
Otherwise, I see nothing else to improve. It looks good.

Ah, I remember you showing off the drafts for these. Excellent species. Do the parents do anything to help aerate the water (like splashing) in order to provide fresh oxygen to the developing eggs?

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?:

• External?: Coloration, keratin sheath, abundant spikes, spots
• Internal?:
• Behavioral/Mental?: Burrowing, Loss of harem

Are Changes Realistic?:
New Genus Needed?: Y

Habitat:
Type?: 1/2
Flavor?: 1/2
Connected?: Y
Wildcard?: N/A

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y (10 cm -> 20 cm)
Exception?: N/A

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Y

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: N/A
Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: N/A

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: N/A

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Different pooling locations but same principle

Description:
Length?: Good
Capitalized correctly?: y
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: N/A

Status: Pending Genus

QUOTE (MNIDJM @ Dec 3 2021, 12:31 PM)

Approval Checklist: Art: Art Present?: Y Art clear?: Y Gen number?: Y All limbs shown?: Y Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y Realistic additions?: Y Name: Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y Creator?: Y Ancestor: Listed?: Y What changes?: External?: Coloration, keratin sheath, abundant spikes, spots Internal?: Behavioral/Mental?: Burrowing, Loss of harem Are Changes Realistic?: New Genus Needed?:  Y Habitat: Type?: 1/2 Flavor?: 1/2 Connected?: Y Wildcard?: N/A Size: Same as Ancestor?: N Within range?: Y (10 cm -> 20 cm) Exception?: N/A Support: Same as Ancestor?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y Other?: Y Diet: Same as Ancestor?: Y Transition Rule?: N/A Reasonable changes (if any)?: N/A Respiration: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y Other?: N/A Thermoregulation: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y Other?: N/A Reproduction: Same as Ancestor?: Y Does It Fit Habitat?: Y Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y Other?:  Different pooling locations but same principle Description: Length?: Good Capitalized correctly?: y Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split Other?: N/A Status: Pending Genus

I feel like it should still be in the same genus as it’s ancestor, as the changes to its physical anatomy are still pretty similar. It has a little bit more spikes but that’s not exactly much of a change. The biggest change is probably the keratin sheath on the mouth but that probably makes it just a divergent member of the genus Agrisaurulus.

Alright then