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"radula-like spine covered" Spine-covered. Otherwise, one might confuse "spine" for "backbone".
"blood containing haemoglobin": Haemoglobin-containing blood, or, as an option that's not so good, "blood, containing haemoglobin". Strictly speaking, "haemoglobin-based blood" is a little more specific and natural-sounding.
"specialize each in their own" sounds redundant.
"growth, others" You surely meant to insert "while" or "and" before "others".
"startled" Startle.
It needs a scientific name. If you want to go with something basic, "Floraverm spp." or "Floravermus spp" will work, since its common name sounds pretty scientific anyway.

The paper background should be decreased in prominence: it's grainy and the lighting is uneven. I also recommend making the lineart look sharper with some quick image processing, although that isn't required.

Since it's a genus group, and a somewhat specialized one at that compared to most species, I recommend adding a little more detail. What's the species distribution like for various kinds of flora? Are there particular varieties of flora, such as less digestible kinds, they don't eat? Are the specific types of tissue listed the only ones they eat? (Say, not eating thorns, prickles, hard tubers, seeds, inner bark or outer bark) Are they deterred by particular kinds of compounds or flavors? Are they active at specific times? Are they, like their ancestors, rarely found in aquatic biomes? How much detritus do they eat compared to fresh growth? (In comparison, roly-polies prefer decaying matter to seedlings, while some snail species prefer decomposing matter to fresh plants)

Floravermis would be more accurate I think (for a genus)

Genus groups need plural titles.

I added an s

I added more to the end of the description.

I was wondering if it was too sparse, does this clarify enough? Are there more things that come to mind that need to be added to the description?

"driftwood islands," Driftwood Islands needs to be capitalized, since it refers to a (somewhat) specific place.

Well, I myself am not in favor of extraneous genus groups like these, but I suppose the descriptions are more detailed than the microbe genus groups or genus-group-boom Meiouks and Aphluks, to showcase just two. It can't be rejected for lack of detail, at least.

Thank you

I created this with the intention of making more species out of it.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Nov 9 2021, 09:49 PM)

Thank you I created this with the intention of making more species out of it.

The picture is a sublimity of worm tho (woerum), WOEURM!).

I welcome and applaud this new, little and super important genus!

Also, it's cool that you're planning to make more diversity of "invertebrates" via this. Any other plans for genera or small and/or aquatic fauna/flora in the near future? Also, are the splits going to be genera or individual species?

Also, how do you color your art? I want to see if it's something I could feasibly do myself.

I color my art using Crayola colored pencils.

I sketch a drawing with a pencil, then either follow the lines I want with a fine tip pen first or color first, but I always do both but the time I'm done.

I realized I want to clarify something more about their internal anatomy in order to make an aquatic form in the future.

I'll do that tomorrow.

"it's entire life": Its entire life.
Forest fire: "Forest for", unless you got confused when trying to write a sentence about how they respond to forest fires.

No that's autocorrect

Added more about the tracheal system

I'll add more about the initial questions later,
I don't often think about when a thing may be active.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Nov 10 2021, 09:16 AM

Added about active times

The image link appears dead on my end

Image source replaced.