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This was a fun swap/collaboration to do.

Oh, just a heads up, but I believe the Crystank Flashsprout is spelled Crystank Flasprout. There's no h in it.

fixed

Approval Checklist:
Art:
Art Present?: Y
Art clear?: Y
Gen number?: Y
All limbs shown?: Y
Reasonably Comparable to Ancestor?: Y
Realistic additions?: Y

Name:
Binomial Taxonomic Name?: Y
Creator?: Y

Ancestor:
Listed?: Y
What changes?: Dome shape, became deciduous pigment density shifts seasonally, antifreeze, reproductive method
External?: Y
Internal?: Y
Behavioral/Mental?: Y
Are Changes Realistic?: Y
New Genus Needed?: Yes, significant reproductive change

Habitat:
Type?: 1??
Flavor?: 3
Connected?: Yes
Wildcard?: ...

Size:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Within range?: Y
Exception?: I guess this is technically a Flora

Support:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Clarified cell wall

Diet:
Same as Ancestor?: Y
Transition Rule?: Na
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Changed term for blood use

Respiration:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Clarified method

Thermoregulation:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Clarified method

Reproduction:
Same as Ancestor?: N
Does It Fit Habitat?: Y
Reasonable changes (if any)?: Y
Other?: Interesting choice

Description:
Length?: Decent
Capitalized correctly?: Yes
Replace/Split from ancestor?: Split
Other?: The paragraphs could be spaced better, otherwise it's structure well and the voice of it is pleasant.

Opinion: Pending(why)

There are some fixes necessary:


"Period have long since passed and in its place is are brisk,"

Mishap

"complex and a handful of other otherwise-maladapted denizens"

I like this however following other with other is awkward.

"deposit a packet containing both the walker’s and the shell’s sperm"

Should the shells gametes be considered sperm? Is there a significant ova counterpart?

"With spermatocytes conjugated with their respective components’ gametes"

This is related to previous comment, I'm not sure it's clarifying enough regarding the gamete system in play.

I'm curious about the deciduous nature, it may be good to clarify why the color change occurs, example in plants it is because chlorophyll ceases production and what remains are accessory pigments and defensive pigments, when eventually fade themselves.

Yea, the deciduous colors are exactly for the manufacture of the last sugars for the year, which I imagine is the case for certain earth plants.

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Autumn_leaf_color

I'm trying to find sources on the light levels of polar regions.

It may be better to find out what the dominant light is at different angles of the sun in the sky, then determine where the sun is at different times of the year for Sagan 4 regions.

This post has been edited by colddigger: Dec 20 2021, 12:40 PM