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they will voit their eggs

Do you mean vomit?

I think its kind of cute.

Made the edit!

Aw, thanks kopout!!

I like the design and texturing.

Given just how many species Plowskuniks spread, it would be useful to list those under bullet points, and especially bullet points separated by direct flora and indirect fauna transfers.

"flippsima's": Flippskimas.
"The plowskunik[...]they". Unless "plowskunik" has an unusual plural, like "deer" and "sheep", the plural needs to be chnaged.

"digging whether": needs a comma.
"plowskunik mainly uses their chin": Singular-they error.
"brown though": It sounds breathless, so I recommend a comma.
"dug-out": Generally, burrows are dug out. Do you mean "dugout" as in earth lodge shelters? If so, that's different from a burrow.

"plowskunik will go into their burrow": Pronoun issue.
If this ability to go into torpor is only useful during unusually cold winters, rather than being automatically initiated, what biological signals do they use?
"vomit": How accurate is that? That suggests they generate gametes from within their stomachs, which is surely not the case.

What are their oxygen needs during a state of torpor? Since they breathe through their mouths, how do they minimize moisture loss over time?
"flora overtime": Over time.

Alright, made some grammatical edits!

As for going in torpor, would having them sensing changes in temperature and food becoming less abundant being good indicators for them to go into torpor?

Hmmm, maybe their breathing slows and they require less oxygen during torpor?

Sensing daylight changes, with a confirming mechanism of reduced food, should be effective torpor indicators, judging by bears' torpor (frequently mistaken for true hibernation). Sensing changes in temperature might be less reliable, because anomalously cold weather for two days might trigger it. Notably, some parts of its range would get colder earlier (Drake Alpine, for example) than others.

Slowing breathing would minimize moisture loss, as would having some kind of moisture-retaining or re-capturing mechanism in their mouths. A turbinate-like structure on the roof of the mouth might capture water if the mouth's open just slightly, or perhaps some kind of moisture-capturing baleen-like structure growing at the edges of the mouth.

It's still necessary to update the habitat adjustments lists with bullet points and separations, and standardize the ending of the sentences. I recommend making them all end in periods.

You could also I just let the mouth dry out, surface layer become dead, then shed when back to being active.

QUOTE (colddigger @ Dec 24 2021, 11:58 PM)

You could also I just let the mouth dry out, surface layer become dead, then shed when back to being active.

Given Sagan 4's pathogens are rather underdeveloped compared to real life, this would actually be plausible.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Dec 25 2021, 03:10 PM)

QUOTE (colddigger @ Dec 24 2021, 11:58 PM) You could also I just let the mouth dry out, surface layer become dead, then shed when back to being active. Given Sagan 4's pathogens are rather underdeveloped compared to real life, this would actually be plausible.

For now. I am considering retconning some of this with the open Week 23 and 22 slots.

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Dec 25 2021, 01:25 AM)

Sensing daylight changes, with a confirming mechanism of reduced food, should be effective torpor indicators, judging by bears' torpor (frequently mistaken for true hibernation). Sensing changes in temperature might be less reliable, because anomalously cold weather for two days might trigger it. Notably, some parts of its range would get colder earlier (Drake Alpine, for example) than others. Slowing breathing would minimize moisture loss, as would having some kind of moisture-retaining or re-capturing mechanism in their mouths. A turbinate-like structure on the roof of the mouth might capture water if the mouth's open just slightly, or perhaps some kind of moisture-capturing baleen-like structure growing at the edges of the mouth. It's still necessary to update the habitat adjustments lists with bullet points and separations, and standardize the ending of the sentences. I recommend making them all end in periods.

Alright, added in some stuff related to it going into torpor. How do these changes look?

Updated the list of species spread by the Plowskunik.

QUOTE (OviraptorFan @ Jan 12 2022, 12:58 AM)

QUOTE (Coolsteph @ Dec 25 2021, 01:25 AM) Sensing daylight changes, with a confirming mechanism of reduced food, should be effective torpor indicators, judging by bears' torpor (frequently mistaken for true hibernation). Sensing changes in temperature might be less reliable, because anomalously cold weather for two days might trigger it. Notably, some parts of its range would get colder earlier (Drake Alpine, for example) than others. Slowing breathing would minimize moisture loss, as would having some kind of moisture-retaining or re-capturing mechanism in their mouths. A turbinate-like structure on the roof of the mouth might capture water if the mouth's open just slightly, or perhaps some kind of moisture-capturing baleen-like structure growing at the edges of the mouth. It's still necessary to update the habitat adjustments lists with bullet points and separations, and standardize the ending of the sentences. I recommend making them all end in periods. Alright, added in some stuff related to it going into torpor. How do these changes look?

Also, any comments on this?

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